Talk:Parents, Families, and Friends of Lesbians and Gays

To do. Please write a brief definition or description of this article at Parents, Families, and Friends of Lesbians and Gays/Definition.

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First (instructor) evaluation comments

Hi Kevin,

Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft:

• The "History" section looks to be off to a good start; you might still flesh it out a bit more, though, perhaps by extending your research beyond the organization's own website. The second subsection in particular seems a bit rushed.
• Rather than simply list PFLAG's "objectives and beliefs," you might develop each point further into its own pararaph or subsection.
• Same goes for the "Programs" -- you might elaborate a bit more on what each one is all about.
• The "Organizational structure" section might include information about current leading individuals within the organization and perhaps total membership numbers.
• The "Achievements" section would benefit from more explanation and contextualization -- it seems to be taking for granted that readers are already pretty familiar with the episodes you mention.
• The "Public perceptions and controversies" section could do much more to convey the high level of controversy surrounding LGBT issues. As in earlier sections, you might provide more contextualization and explanation.
• Throughout the article, you might put double square brackets (i.e. [[ ]] ) around key terms to create links to other Citizendium articles; e.g., Jeanne Manford, Military Readiness Enhancement Act, Pat Robertson
• Finally, remember that you need to fill out the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages in addition to the main article page.

Shamira Gelbman 02:22, 6 October 2009 (UTC)