Talk:Canadian Copyright in Contrast to American Copyright

To do. Please write a brief definition or description of this article at Canadian Copyright in Contrast to American Copyright/Definition.

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Moved from one with the wrong title. Patrick Nikulak 16:49, 13 March 2012 (UTC)

Hi Patrick, next time we'll use the 'move' tab to move an article to a new page rather than a copy and paste. That way the history of your edits will come with the article. If you have trouble, feel free to drop a note on my talk page. D. Matt Innis 23:29, 16 March 2012 (UTC)

Approval Process: Approval notice

Call for review: Anthony.Sebastian 23:40, 19 March 2012 (UTC)

Requested by author User:Patrick Nikulak

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Please discuss the article below, under 'Comments'.  Canadian Copyright in Contrast to American Copyright/Approval is for brief official referee's only!

Comments

I hope that I don't sound like a stickler for formatting ... but I don't believe that this article is ready for approval because:

• It has no "Definition" subpage. It should be created and include a definition.
• It has no "Related Articles" subpage or "Bibliography" subpage or "External Links" subpage. All 3 should at least be created and at least 2 of them should be populated to some extent.
• The references are not formatted as they should be. References should not include "raw" urls like http://www.gowlings.com/KnowledgeCentre/article.asp?pubID=2231 . See Help:Index/Formatting/References for a tutorial on how to create Citizendium references.
• The author, Patrick Nikulak, is not an Editor, yet he has signed the Metadata page as the "ToA Editor" nominating the article for approval. Is that kosher???

As for the writing style of the main article, a brief scan disclosed that it lacks a good number of commas and there are some other typos that need correcting. I would suggest that one of our Linguistic experts, like Ro Thorpe, review the article from the viewpoint of spelling and grammar.

I am no copyright expert by any stretch of the imagination, but the actual content of the article appears to be good and knowledgeable to me.

Overall, I would rate this article as a status 2 (Developing article) rather than a status 1 (Developed completely or nearly so). Milton Beychok 02:46, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

I have copyedited this article to some extent. Henry A. Padleckas 15:15, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Initial comments for author Patrick Nikulak

• Patrick, any author may request a call for review for an Article Approval, which I have done for you (see above), but nominations for approval must come from an Editor, or the Approval Manager, as I understand the policy:

"An article (including subpages like Bibliography, Definition, External links, Related articles) is so well developed that it gives the Citizendium reader a good introduction and overview to its topic. An editor in the article's workgroup will be needed to nominate the article for approval." See: http://en.citizendium.org/wiki/CZ:Approval_Process#Overview

• You have not provided a definition, or developed any of the subpages of the article. Please consider whether you can improve the article by doing so.

• A few sentences in the text seem to express a personal opinion, or 'point of view'. Those expressions are best eliminated:
  • "The first, and perhaps most terrifying, is the fact that it made breaking DRM illegal."
  • "Finally, perhaps the most important part of the legislation is the limitation of liability to ISP’s." BTW: ISPs preferable to ISP's, as the context implies plural, not possessive.

• ↑ Harris, Lesley. Canadian Copyright Law. Washington Special Collections, 2001. http://search.proquest.com.libproxy.uregina.ca:2048/docview/197383124 (accessed March 1, 2012). The link to this reference does not seem correct.

• Patrick, I will remove the nomination banner, and begin looking for an Editor in Workgroups Law, Education, and Sociology to nominate the article.

• I found the article interesting.  —Anthony.Sebastian 03:04, 20 March 2012 (UTC), Approval Manager.

Milton, your comments popped up as I was writing mine. We seem generally to agree. Anthony.Sebastian 03:16, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

Hi, Tony: Our comments are so similar that it is eerie. Milton Beychok 03:57, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

The sentence "The first, and perhaps most terrifying, is the fact that it made breaking DRM illegal." does not seem completely understandable to me. In my last copyedit, I clarified in that sentence that DRM meant Digital rights management with a link to the article. Henry A. Padleckas 15:23, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

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I am uncomfortable with the fact that of the 12 references, 4 are from blogs and 2 are from news items. Personally, I don't usually consider such sources to be credible ... especially the blogs. Milton Beychok 03:57, 20 March 2012 (UTC)

"The United States (US) Government accuses Canada of being a haven for piracy while Canadian consumers believe it is just right" sounds awkward. I believe there are handful of awkward statements throughout the article. (Chunbum Park 05:09, 21 March 2012 (UTC))