Talk:Obesogenic environment

Callum Bateman 17:28, 20 September 2011 (UTC) Amy Douglas 18:17, 20 September 2011 (UTC) Helen Martin 18:41, 3 October 2011 (UTC)

Good pick of papers Helen!Gareth Leng 13:05, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi Callum, I moved the 2 refs you added into the Bibliography page. Nancy Sabatier 12:46, 11 October 2011 (UTC)-

Your summaries are good - you can write fluently and grasp the essence - but remember that the most important thing to capture, for any paper, is not what the authors think but what the evidence actually is. Any good article must show the evidence behind the conclusions.Gareth Leng 20:14, 12 October 2011 (UTC)

Good work so far on the article - you're identifying questions in a logically structured way and picking out key pieces of evidence from strong sources. Be careful to say enough about the evidence to display what the evidence actually shows rather than simply asserting that there is evidence and citing a paper - some details are critical, such as whether these are human studies or studies in rats, and the kind of studies that they are; they may need a little more explanation to make it very clear what the nature of the evidence is. Don't go overboard on this, a few key phrases is all that may be needed.

I've made some minor tweaks - check the edit history to see what those are. For your dissertation work next semester it will be very important that you get into the habit of referencing consistently and giving full links; it's also important for encyclopedia articles but you certainly won't be expected to remember reference details for exams. Gareth Leng 10:33, 26 October 2011 (UTC)